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Gonna sound like a total prick...
The Question
wilowisp
Ok, so I'm working on a small, narrative poem. Real simple abab stanzas, unless I get ambitious with structure. A little torn, though, between imabic trimeter, iambic tetrameter and a mix of the two within stanzas. Wondering if anyone had any opinion at all.

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Ick. I feel like I just wrote notes in the margins of my personal copy of Atlas Shrugged.

EDIT: Per gunn's comment, here are some sample comparisons. Forgive my poor poetic vocabulary for assuming these fall into simple categories of iambic meter, as I'm sure they do not.

They each approached the body
The words they crossed were short
One claimed him for the Abbey
The other, for the Court

They came upon the body cold
The words they crossed were terse and short
One claimed the fallen for the Abbey
The other, for the Court

They came upon the body cold
The words they crossed were terse and short
One claimed the fallen for the Abbey
The other claimed him for the Court


But see his blushing visage?
His eyes with self-disdain?
He has a hint of Sorrow
But reeks of Doubt and Shame

But see the blush upon his cheeks?
His lidded eyes with self-disdain?
He has with him a hint of Sorrow
But reeks of Doubt and Shame

But see the blush upon his cheeks?
His lidded eyes with self-disdain?
He has with him a hint of Sorrow
But great he reeks of Doubt and Shame

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You should give some examples of what each are, and people can respond with what they find more aesthetically pleasing.

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